User blog comment:Knight of Camlorn/my first fan fic/@comment-7153552-20131008190223

I think it needs some fleshing out and some grammar checks. Give a little background to the era within the story, so it's not confused with any current canon. The biggest thing any fanon can do wrong is conflict too majorly with established lore, it's a fine line sometimes, but you certainly don't want to give anyone reason to doubt your timeline.

There is certainly quite a bit of potential in the story arch, I think the topics covered in your first writtings can actually be given extra life and cover at least two or three separate parts. All in all, a great start.