User blog comment:Draevan13/The Hero of Kvatch's last hour/@comment-7153552-20131021215010

I usually don't condone straying from accepted canon, but with enough of the Sheogorath arguement being shrouded in mystery I think it acceptable. Well written, I don't know if you have plans in moving this forward, but I'd like to see what becomes of Collin. Where does this lead him, how does this inspire him, things like that. Having the Hero of Kvatch die in the Temple was very peaceful and symbolic, almost as if he somehow knew his hour drew near.

The only thing I didn't like was mentioning each thing that could have been for him in direct detail. I think greying it out a little more would help keep the mystique to it. Something more like " ... some say I worked my way through the Fighter's Guild, others mention that I saved the Mage's Guild, I've heard some fool ranting about some odd door and the Madgod ... "  Or something like that, at least. Some of them could be specific, but keeping intrigue to the story helps add validity to the lack of immortality, in my opinion.

All-in-all, good story, great first fanon. I hope you keep it up!